It’s Madness I tell you….Second Installment

Writing 101, Day Thirteen: Serial Killer II

Earlier in the course, you wrote about losing something. Today, write about finding something. For your twist, view day four’s post and today’s post as installments in a series. Today’s twist: if you wrote day four’s post as the first in a series, use this one as the second installment — loosely defined.

Here are a few more pages of the novel I started writing over 20 years ago. This has got me thinking… I need to do some major revisions and go back and take each section and go from there. I will have to take each one of the wacky bunch and write a couple of chapters on them…. What do you think? Leave some feedback…

It’s Madness I tell you…..

Second Installment Introduction to the Flannery Clan of Southern Mississippi

In 1968 Ethan and his high school sweetheart, Jillian get married. All is well for a year or so, and then Ethan begins to drink heavily and cheat on Jillian. When she confronts him a couple of months later the beatings begin. Jillian faces possible hearing loss from the most severe of these beatings. In 1976 Ethan and Janelle run away together, leaving her three children with her husband who is Jillian’s brother. The courts grant full custody to the father; peace and quiet reign for a few months until Ethan and Janelle reappear in 1977 wanting to see the children. After a few weeks of abiding by the court order, and lulling everyone into a false sense of security that they really had the children’s best interest at heart, Ethan and Janelle leave town with the children not to be heard from for more than six months.

In 1968 Evan and Joni (high school sweethearts again) marry. To these two lovebirds Michael is born in August of 1969, Tessa in March of 1972, and Lea in February of 1973. Not many knew of the turmoil in this household. You see, Evan didn’t drink and he was very clever with making himself look good to the outside world. However, those of us who were close to Joni saw the scars and the bruises that lasted for months.

Once Evan was given the opportunity for the easy life without the responsibility of kids, he too departed without any thought of his kids and wife. This time the other woman is the “older” woman! What? Maybe a mother complex you say! But again, Evan has no children to help raise and take care of as Mildred’s children are grown, the youngest child being the same age as Evan.

1968 and 1969 were really the years of the marriages in this Irish clan. Now it’s whose turn? Oh yeah, Lawrence only knew Shannon three months when she accepted his proposal, stupid huh?? Especially since he was already engaged to someone else! They seemed to get along really well until they decided to get married, then it was like they were constantly fighting over something or nothing. That should have been a warning, but, as I’ve said before, apparently “love is blind” in both eyes!!!

Shannon received here engagement ring in the most unusual way! One of Lawrence’s cousins retrieved the rings his ex-girlfriend had been given, took them back to the jewelry store and swapped them for another set he had picked out. Lawrence had them at school and the principle had put them in the safe. Just before the day was over the principal called Shannon to the office and told here the rings were there and proceeded to try to talk her out of getting married and going to college instead. Oh! She should have listened to him more then.

Stay tuned for more on the next  “serial” postings days in the Writing 101 challenges.

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2 responses to “It’s Madness I tell you….Second Installment

  1. I enjoyed reading this, and would like to know/read more. What I would suggest to you, if I may, is to engage more with the reader. Give us something to connect to, as right now it reads more as a list than a story. You have all the pieces there and the making of an awesome novel that I would surely buy and read, just connect with us…for example…
    “In 1968 Evan and Joni (high school sweethearts again) marry. To these two lovebirds Michael is born in August of 1969, Tessa in March of 1972, and Lea in February of 1973. Not many knew of the turmoil in this household. You see, Evan didn’t drink and he was very clever with making himself look good to the outside world. However, those of us who were close to Joni saw the scars and the bruises that lasted for months.”
    You are telling us this information, but it would be more powerful if we could see the effect it has on the family. Expand on this. You have such a nice moment when “You see, Evan didn’t drink and he was clever making himself look good to the outside world…” HOW? Why is he doing this? Or for how long? How does Joni react? How does she try to hide it? Or does she try to hide it? Why is the family not saying anything? Things like that.
    Hope this helps, and look forward to Part 3! Great start!!!

  2. It needs a lot of work. That’s the reason I said I needed to go back and do major work on it. I started this more than 20 years ago and put it to the side and never went back. Took some writing classes a few years ago at a local library, picked it up and did a timeline and character development (which really should have been done first. I appreciate the comments here and anymore you might have. If you have time give me your email and I will fill you in on where this comes from.
    Thanks 🙂

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